Narrtive writing 1

The haunted theme park.

One day there was a theme park  in America. The theme park’s name was Lost Land  . There was this boy named Gary he was short haired and has black hair. Then an unseen ghost came out of nowhere  and possessed the roller coaster.  The ghost that was trying to scare Gary was named Bloody man, he had red hair and his skin was red and had  black stripes on his face . When Gary arrived at the roller coaster, there was something wrong with the roller coaster it couldn't work. When the rides were going he saw something in the distance he rang the police and they nevered picked up so he rang his friend and said “help there is something around this theme park” as he was talking the ghost got closer and closer so he kept on talking and his phone died on full charge, so he was sure that it was a ghost that was in the distance he was getting very sacred and started to run around the theme park wherever he went there was something in the distance so he kept on running until he got exhausted and bend over and took a break he was very scared that he couldn't stop. As he was taking a break the ghost was getting very close so he was sick of running and just wait for the ghost to come. When the ghost finally got there bloody man was about to push him of the edge of the deck into the water full of sharks.  And finally his friend turned up and sucked the ghost up in his hand made machine. As Gary raised he held his  hand out  said”your next” in a creepy way but he was just joking.